ANIMATIC 4

Animatic 4 – Feedback 5/03/20

Tutor: Tess

• In the film the animation of the girl walking through the street, the audio then title.
• 10sec is perfect!
  walking around the corner of the street, then the title comes up, audio- ‘take it as a compliment.”
• After the scene where the character is harassed on the street, add the audio.
  It’s a form of showing off.
• (Add some symbol images, correspond.)
  – delete the front of the shop scene.
  – have the character leaving the coffee shop.
  – maybe have the door open then closed?
• Medium shot of the two guys smoking outside the coffee shop.
• Think of metaphors.

@0:54 The character is too close, pull out the shot have a child appear behind them, while they are catcalling at the women.

@0:40 Look at video “wedding Espresso” by Sandra Mosby.
Draw fewer lines for the backgrounds the audiences will know where they are in the film.

The Audio

• Use thesarus.com to help you come up with the right words.
• For example, offences, empowered, undermine.
• Be more processes in front of a trans-script.

@1:21 “if I do speak out, they deny it.”

Its power play changes the word option.

The Film

• Have the characters just stand their wat h for dead space.
• Have the scene of the train doors opening – simple.
• Make the male characters shifty.
• Add it’s a form of showing off audio with two characters are showing off at the coffee shop.
• Make the female character uncomfortable.
• During the train, the scene adds an animation of someone playing busking.

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